Tojishiro wrote:
Pushing40 wrote:
X tries to give Y some instructions but Y doesn't seem to understand.
X tries to give you some instructions but you can't understand. X returns your coins.
Not entirely newbie friendly and intuitive. "Doesn't seem to understand" doesn't really state clearly it's due to lack of experience.
Perhaps something along the lines of "X tries to give Y some instructions but Y doesn't seem to be capable of learning something at this time. Perhaps train more?"
I don't think the standard line has to be newbie-friendly. That's where the oldbie, the mentor, steps in and puts his fingers on the keyboard. The oldbie sees that line show up, and takes it as an opportunity to engage in in-character conversation as a result. I understand your position. You desire for any "new and improved" message to be as informative as the "old and worn out" message it is replacing. But I don't think it is necessary, as I have (somewhat snarkily) suggested above.
Your suggestion will work the way you intend it to work, and is acceptable as such. My suggestion would allow for a more personal touch, a more in-character response, more involvement from the mentor.